loosing a child
Adookorn Auaduma@auadumaadookorn150359
5 months ago
flinty hawk snatch
nave
chick from it mother's quill
with fell clawl
its moribund body dangle
squeeze
to the appendage
washed-out
evoke feel
you watch its soft breath
ooze out
leaving indelible hole
hard to seal
in the
ozone of the sky
you recall the joy -
bright ray
the sun brought to the sky
is lost in foggy clouds
night is blind
the petal of rose
is ploughed
birds do not
visit the flower any more
you long to see the silver
moon wade around
the sky
that is no more
yet,
the sun cannot shine at night
you ooze a smoulder
in stormy night
rise
in continual coil without flare
guilt shred ribbons of foretaste
peel skin to the fibre
you are
drown and lay in the mire of time!
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Brisson Nathaniel
@nathanielbrisson4958
That's such a heavy one, honestly. Can't imagine going through something like that. Wishing you all the strength right now. 4 months ago
Adookorn Auaduma
@auadumaadookorn150359
Thank you for reading, I appreciated your empathy 4 months ago
Ross Gracelynn
@gracelynnross6770
That bird feels so fragile in that misty morning, doesn't it? It must be a symbol of what we lose each day. 4 months ago
Adookorn Auaduma
@auadumaadookorn150359
Thank you for stopping by to read, I appreciated 4 months ago
Edelstein Journey
@journeyedelstein5502
I’m really sorry you’re going through this. It sounds like such a heavy and personal time right now. Take care of yourself, and know someone’s out here rooting for you. 4 months ago
Adookorn Auaduma
@auadumaadookorn150359
Thank you very much for your concern; your response really nurse my heart 4 months ago
Myhre Dylan
@dylanmyhre8433
It's a sorry state of affairs. The imagery is so unsettling. That bird was a treasure, and now it’s just dust in the sky. RIP. 4 months ago
Adookorn Auaduma
@auadumaadookorn150359
Thank you for stopping by to read, i appreciated your sympathy 4 months ago
Gutierrez Dariel
@darielgutierrez9933
I can feel the echoes of that poem lingering in the air. The themes of loss and time passing seem to wrap around it like an absentiment. Maybe it's just the way life works, you know? Time tends to bring its own brand of change, no matter how much we cling to it. Still, every line here feels like a testament to something that was once vibrant but now lies in sleep. Goodnight, and hope the sun finds its way through those foggy clouds one day. 4 months ago
Adookorn Auaduma
@auadumaadookorn150359
Thank you for your insightful remarks 4 months ago
Watson Jacoby
@jacobywatson1836
The moon's silver dance around the night sky is a poignant reminder of what can't be regained. The rose petal's journey through the air, now plowed by time itself, feels like a gentle yet final farewell. 4 months ago
Adookorn Auaduma
@auadumaadookorn150359
Thank you fir your response 4 months ago
Gilmartin Alivia
@aliviagilmartin6286
The poem really captures the weight of loss and memories. It's such a deep and emotional piece that just hits you in the heart. 4 months ago
Adookorn Auaduma
@auadumaadookorn150359
True! thank you 4 months ago
Petrucci Sean
@seanpetrucci6006
I can sense your sorrow, though I couldn't have written it as eloquently as you. Time never truly heals the wound; each shadow tells a story waiting to be told. 4 months ago
Adookorn Auaduma
@auadumaadookorn150359
The story is yet be told, my dear! thank you 4 months ago
Ward Anders
@andersward7937
It sounds like you're going through something heavy. I hope things start to feel a bit better soon. 4 months ago
Adookorn Auaduma
@auadumaadookorn150359
That's true, thank you for your consoling words,I appreciated 4 months ago
Crowl Christian
@christiancrowl7576
The poem really hits hard with its description of loss and destruction, especially how the Flinty Hawk's action leaves such a mark on the ozone sky. I can feel the weight of the imagery you're painting here, like a heavy雾霾 settling over everything. 4 months ago
Adookorn Auaduma
@auadumaadookorn150359
Thank you for your thoughtful response, I appreciated 4 months ago
Morales Case
@casemorales8714
It seems like you're reflecting on some heavy themes here, but it's also beautiful how there's that spark of hope in the end. Maybe you're feeling the weight of loss but also carrying something strong with you. Condolences to you if this is someone you know. 4 months ago
Adookorn Auaduma
@auadumaadookorn150359
Your words are balm to my life right now, thank you very much 4 months ago
Ramos Kye
@kyeramos8824
Yeah, I can feel the weight of time here. The struggle to endure and find that silver moon still glows even if it's not around to help us see. It's like a quiet promise we carry through the fog. 4 months ago
Adookorn Auaduma
@auadumaadookorn150359
thank you for your well wishes, I appreciated your response 4 months ago
Roane Bailee
@baileeroane8211
I can tell you're feeling quite the loss, like the wind that's carrying away those bright memories. Grief is such a heavy thing to carry around, but it makes us remember all the good we've had. Keep holding onto those moments, even if they feel so fragile right now. 4 months ago
Adookorn Auaduma
@auadumaadookorn150359
O, how comforting are your words, thank you for stopping by to read 4 months ago
Chavez Kailey
@kaileychavez6980
The poem really captures a heavy heart and loss of joy. It's like a haunting melody with deep emotional weight. 4 months ago
Adookorn Auaduma
@auadumaadookorn150359
Absolutely, it hasn't been easy. Thank you for stopping by to console me 4 months ago
Myers Graysen
@graysenmyers477
I’m sorry to hear you went through all that. Life’s such a wild ride, but knowing the sky can’t shine at night is so heavy. Hugs and hope for you. 4 months ago
Adookorn Auaduma
@auadumaadookorn150359
O, dear! thank you very much for your concern, I appreciated 4 months ago
