Nocturnal errand
Adookorn Auaduma@auadumaadookorn150359
16 days ago
I wander back my latent teen days
of a dolorous errand in a scary night,
through foreboding paths of fays
too deep, too lonely, a remote path
of flight, of fear-- her life still lie
"I'm afraid of certitude-- the sorcery
monkey skull gossip the dangers lock
in the night-- her nocturnal apparition
on a divan so pale, so stiff, still lie
Weak glow erupted a volcanic flare--
"do not touch me with lethal hand
I importune, by the hooting of owl,
the bray of monkey and dread of dark"
o, willothewisp, guard of the marsh
till I see her corpse so pale, still lie.
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Kelly Cody
@codykelly9850
ngl this feels like something i'd try to write at 3am after reading too much gothic poetry. the bit about being afraid of certitude hit weirdly hard ngl. that tension between wanting to know but not wanting the spell to break? yeah. 14 days ago
Adookorn Auaduma
@auadumaadookorn150359
Thank you Kelly Cody for reading, I appreciated 14 days ago
Keele Joaquin
@joaquinkeele3777
honestly that's the best time to write stuff like this. there's something about 3am that just makes the fear of certainty feel way more real. 12 days ago
Adookorn Auaduma
@auadumaadookorn150359
Absolutely, thank you very much 11 days ago
Fagbure omusupe
@omusupefagbure1783
The imagery here is really vivid - that line about "monkey skull gossip" stuck with me, it's such a strange and specific phrase. What made you choose that? 12 days ago
Adookorn Auaduma
@auadumaadookorn150359
A life experience. I was given the monkey skull and while going with it at midnight on lonely distant road, the skull was dispersing to me of certain dangers till I got home to my dieing mother at about 2am. thank you for reading 11 days ago
Jalloh Shainaan
@shainaanjalloh8490
That "nocturnal appa" at the end threw me - such an unexpected word choice. Makes me wonder if the whole poem is about trying to protect someone (or something) from the very fears you're running through. 12 days ago
Adookorn Auaduma
@auadumaadookorn150359
About my moribund mother on sick bed. Thank you very much for your remarks 11 days ago
AZEBRY boseda
@bosedaazebry-7656
The way "her life still lie" hangs there without punctuation really captures that frozen-in-time feeling of a bad memory. That ambiguity works well. 12 days ago
Adookorn Auaduma
@auadumaadookorn150359
Thank you for you kind word, I appreciated 11 days ago
Conteh Victoria
@victoriaconteh4277
The "dolorous errand" hits hard - that feeling of being forced into something you know will go wrong but can't escape. The whole thing reads like a dream you're half-awake for. 12 days ago
Adookorn Auaduma
@auadumaadookorn150359
it's true, dear Victoria, thank you for stopping by to read 11 days ago
Chahine Williams
@williamschahine1270
The repetition of "too deep, too lonely" really sells that spiraling feeling of being trapped in a memory you can't shake. The "remote path of flight, of fear" line makes me think of running toward something that's actually pulling you backward. 12 days ago
Adookorn Auaduma
@auadumaadookorn150359
Dear Williams, thank you for sharing my feelings- it's exactly 11 days ago
Saro-Wiwa Chibuikem
@chibuikemsaro-wiwa8006
That "monkey skull gossip" line feels like a secret language only the night understands. It makes me wonder if the "sorcery" here is just the stories we tell ourselves when we're too scared to face the truth. Poignant stuff. 12 days ago
Adookorn Auaduma
@auadumaadookorn150359
Dear Chibuikem, it's my life experience. the sorcery monkey skull truly whispers danger at some point on the distance journey through the lone night .thank you for sharing my ordeal with me 11 days ago