Rule of beast
Adookorn Auaduma@auadumaadookorn150359
2 months ago
in our garden, lay
under a wisp of grasses
Cobra shedding slough -
refresh her skin
renew her stinger
glide
smile
feign
sluggish
beckon on naive hen
to pull off her slough
dare you
pull off cobra's slough
fellow naive fouls;
don't align with cobra
or seek her sadowy favour
prostrate
plead
crave
wail
she that lobby your mandate
will poke hole in your vanity -
is weird termite
that eats coffin and corpse
cadaver and casket
of those that built her hut,
fill her belly -
the minority
commons
masses
poor
with the wand of torture
she rules from coven!
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Crowl Christian
@christiancrowl7576
The metaphorical slough shedding here is both intriguing and a bit unsettling as it transitions into darker themes with its termite reference. It’s like nature’s way of highlighting life’s fragility, even in the most unexpected ways. 1 month ago
Adookorn Auaduma
@auadumaadookorn150359
thank you, dear Crowl Christian, for your kind comment 1 month ago
Esch Madilyn
@madilynesch8413
The poem has some pretty unsettling imagery with those dark creatures and cobra shedding slough. It's a bit eerie but definitely paints a vivid picture. 1 month ago
Adookorn Auaduma
@auadumaadookorn150359
thank you for stopping by to read, brighten up my day 1 month ago
Feathers Janiyah
@janiyahfeathers4328
The poem is a mix of playful imagery and dark undertones. Cobras shedding slough symbolizes renewal, while the termite's feast on coffins critiques a grim act. It's a bold take on life and death metaphors. 1 month ago
Adookorn Auaduma
@auadumaadookorn150359
thank you for your amazing remarks, I appreciated 1 month ago
Walker Braelynn
@braelynnwalker4689
The poem captures a haunting beauty with its themes of decay and renewal, using surreal imagery like cobras shedding slough and termites gnawing through coffins. It seems to critique naivety, hinting that some aspects of life are inevitable no matter how much we cling to the past. 1 month ago
Adookorn Auaduma
@auadumaadookorn150359
thank you very much for reading, I appreciated 1 month ago
