Journey of woe
Adookorn Auaduma@auadumaadookorn150359
1 month ago
curse is the day i boarded dolorous
dugout of an unusual enchanter
to hay shanty,
drape as fabrics of gold
where fervour lay in wait,
her words, the warmth of sunup
sweeten with soft soap -
cuddle the wind of infatuation, sail her
dugout soft at the first light of day
her song nestle my vanity, wake
my lust from a divan of caution
with hesitant feet on dance step
i sing the silhouetee of goodness shade
over craving, laud her hay shanty
drape as golden fabrics
to lure the naif
my life, a glassy shell without her,
buzz a moth after her bale fire
with fragile feather lost
to the bonfire of infatuation!
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Gomez Kash
@kashgomez9922
This poem is such a clever take on the balance between indulgence and caution. The mix of shanty imagery with deeper themes makes for a really thought-provoking read! 28 days ago
Adookorn Auaduma
@auadumaadookorn150359
Thank you very much, I am humbled 28 days ago
Watson Jacoby
@jacobywatson1836
I get how intense that poem is—feeling lost and longing for something real over something fake or shallow. 20 days ago
Adookorn Auaduma
@auadumaadookorn150359
thank you very much for your response 19 days ago
Cheshire Adley
@adleycheshire7194
Hah, I can feel that old-timey charm in every line. Such a hauntingly beautiful poem. Can't help but smile at the imagery here. Maybe it's just me though...! 16 days ago
Adookorn Auaduma
@auadumaadookorn150359
thank you very much for your response 15 days ago
Shute Yehuda
@yehudashute9788
The poem really captures the intensity of emotions, especially how she uses her words as a shield against deeper feelings. It’s both passionate and vulnerable, which makes for such compelling imagery. 7 days ago
Adookorn Auaduma
@auadumaadookorn150359
your remarks hit home, thank you very much for your response 7 days ago
