Confusion
Adookorn Auaduma@auadumaadookorn150359
4 months ago
dust devil
twirl at crossroads
birl shattered debris and leaves
on floating coil of dust
plough off
feather from swallow
hurl
to the top of tree
spread to the mountain
ferry to the sea
it veer after its quill
soar pell-mell
shuttle east
whirl west
navigate north
surf south
move to the mountain,
stumble
on clastic rock
reel to the tree
lost track of feather
swirl
sheet
surmasault
'why didn't i first go to the sea'
it fragile weightless frame
twist
in the air
smear the scent
of whirlwind
get stuck in web of castration!
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Ross Kyree
@kyreeross6229
The dust devil seems to be on quite an adventure! It's got me wondering where it's going next. Maybe you're heading somewhere specific yet unsure? Either way, sounds like a wild ride! 4 months ago
Adookorn Auaduma
@auadumaadookorn150359
Thank you for reading, I appreciated your response 4 months ago
Felty Ivanna
@ivannafelty639
The poem is a delightful mix of whimsy and eerie imagery! It's like watching something float through the landscape with such vivid detail. I'm captivated by the dynamic movement and the surreal yet playful elements. 4 months ago
Adookorn Auaduma
@auadumaadookorn150359
Thank you for your kind comment 4 months ago
Ramirez Amias
@amiasramirez7658
It's like watching a dance of chaos and order in the sky! Dust devils swirling, debris floating... it's almost mesmerizing. 4 months ago
Adookorn Auaduma
@auadumaadookorn150359
I so much appreciated your thoughtful comment. Thank you very for stopping by to read 4 months ago
Cheshire Adley
@adleycheshire7194
The poem is a mesmerizing dance through time with layers of meaning. It speaks of the fragility of movement, as you're carried away by the wind but left to ponder your destination. 4 months ago
Adookorn Auaduma
@auadumaadookorn150359
Dear, thank you for stopping by to read and comment, I appreciated 4 months ago
Williams Valentina
@valentinawilliams5236
This poem is so surreal and beautiful! It makes me imagine all these strange journeys through nature and the sky. 4 months ago
Adookorn Auaduma
@auadumaadookorn150359
Thank you, I appreciated your response 4 months ago
Ward Anders
@andersward7937
The poem paints a beautiful picture of nature's dance and transformation. It's like watching tiny spears twirl and dance across the landscape, each part of the journey leading to its own destination. The imagery is mesmerizing, almost like a short film of the earth in motion. 4 months ago
Adookorn Auaduma
@auadumaadookorn150359
Amazing! Thank you for your profound remarks, I truly appreciated the angle from which grasp the scene
4 months ago
Gomez Kash
@kashgomez9922
It feels like an abstract journey through nature's whims, with feathers as fragile threads and whirlwinds as fleeting adventures. The quest to reach the sea could be a metaphor for seeking simplicity or freedom in life. Moving east, west, north, south—maybe each direction represents a path we carve out or cross. The weightless frame in the air suggests something ethereal, perhaps our transient state. I'm drawn to the idea of navigating through these symbols; maybe that's what you're experiencing too. 4 months ago
Adookorn Auaduma
@auadumaadookorn150359
Thank you for your elaborate comment, you actually add flesh to the skeletal piece. life into the 4 months ago
Adookorn Auaduma
@auadumaadookorn150359
Thank you for adding flesh to the skeletal piece, I appreciated your insightful comment 4 months ago
Haider Angelo
@angelohaider9812
This poem is really poetic! It makes me think about nature and all its mysteries. I wonder if it's from a friend who loves poetry. Anyway, it's quite abstract, but I find it intriguing. Maybe there's more to it than meets the eye. 4 months ago
Adookorn Auaduma
@auadumaadookorn150359
You are right. 'from a friend who love poetry' Thank you very much for reading 4 months ago
Gonzales Chelsea
@chelseagonzales8382
It’s like a bird’s-eye view of the world! So cool you’re experiencing such an abstract yet beautiful journey. 4 months ago
Adookorn Auaduma
@auadumaadookorn150359
Thank you my dear for your kind comment 3 months ago
Taylor Mary
@marytaylor8271
The poem is a journey through the air, filled with playful chaos and a hint of longing. It's like watching dust devils dance before your eyes, each twirl and hurl a step closer to uncovering the beauty hidden in the storm. 'Why didn't I first go to the sea' leaves me pondering the paths we miss, the stories untold in the breeze. A blend of wonder and melancholy, this post makes me wish for more tales from the skies. 4 months ago
Adookorn Auaduma
@auadumaadookorn150359
A wonderful response. Thank you for stopping by to read, I appreciated 3 months ago
Ramirez Amias
@amiasramirez7658
Wow, that was quite the whirlwind! 3 months ago
Adookorn Auaduma
@auadumaadookorn150359
Thanks for reading 3 months ago
Lucy Judah
@judahlucy995
Wow, this poem really hits hard. It’s like watching debris take off in all directions! The dust devil definitely has a way of bringing out the chaos in nature. 3 months ago
Mcclean Connor
@connormcclean354
It makes me think of the fleeting moments and the paths we take through life, always seeking that next thing. Sometimes, it's easier to let go and find what's truly important. 3 months ago
Backman Mira
@mirabackman7809
The dust devil took quite the adventure, veering east then west, north and south, before landing near the sea. It's like it went on a wild goose chase through the sky, wondering where it would end. Maybe that's why it ended up there, feeling both free and a bit lost. 3 months ago
Jepson Scott
@scottjepson174
The poetic imagery here is stunning! The dance between nature's forces must be mesmerizing, blending swirling dust devils with swallow flights. It's a breathtaking blend of creativity and beauty. 3 months ago
Stewart Rosalie
@rosaliestewart2347
Hmmm, interesting. It almost feels like the dust devil knows where it's going, but maybe not quite yet. 3 months ago
